Sub Copy 1:
so did u watch the game?
yah, it was gr8!! did u?
def! rushed out of the doc's office during a check up.
...y'd u do dat?
wat? didn't wanna miss the game.
er, k.
wats the prob? it wasnt n e thing serious.
u nvr know, dats why u get a check up. dont u noe about Jane's incident.
kinda, but wat bout it.
she wasnt plannin to have a colonoscopy when she went in for check up
then doc's found polyps in her colon
"Jane had colon cancer !?!?!?"
"no, sis prevented it. doc removed polyps early."
opps, fail.
epic fail.
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Sub Copy 2:
Want 2 go get some food?
Ya, where @?
There's a place down in south side.
Where's dat?
Next 2 the gastrologist...
... nice.
Maybe we should stop by?
Aren't we 2 young 4 a colonoscopy?
Errr... my mom had polyps removed when she was only 45.
colonoscopy, ftw.
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Copy 3:
Gramps just put a toupée on Kimmy's baby.
LOL.
Sharin hereditary deficiency.
Yup. Catchin 'em early.
Oh, reminds me to tell you, my mom had colon cancer.
Really? I didn't know women could get colon cancer.
O RLY.
...sorry d00d.
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Copy 4:
gettin pizza
pizza > no pizza
FOREALZ, want some?
nope, can't eat
Y not?
Getting the procedure tmr dat mom suggested we'd get.
d00d, no way am I having THAT 'procedure'.
Don't u think dad would have prevented his colon cancer if he could have?
gg.
I'm bookin u 4 tmr.
Sub Copy 1:
ReplyDeletedid u watch the game?
yah, it was gr8!! did u?
def! rushed out of the doc's office during a check up.
...y'd u do dat?
wat? didnt wanna miss the game.
er, k.
wats the prob? it wasnt anything serious.
u nvr know, dats why u get a check up. dont u noe bout Jane's incident.
kinda, but wat bout it?
she wasnt plannin to have a colonoscopy when she went in for check up, then doc found polyps in her colon
"Jane had colon cancer !?!?!?"
"no, sis prevented it. doc removed polyps early."
hmm...maybe i should do a check up 2.
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Sub Copy 2:
Want 2 go get some food?
K, where @?
There's a place down in south side.
Where's dat?
Next 2 da gastrologist...
...k.
Maybe we should stop by?
Aren't we 2 young 4 colonoscopy?
Errr... my mom had polyps removed when she was only 45.
colonoscopy, ftw.
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Copy 3:
Gramps just put a toupée on Kimmy's baby.
LOL.
Sharin' hereditary deficiency.
Yup. Catchin 'em early.
Oh, reminds me to tell you, my mom had colon cancer.
Really? I didn't know women could get colon cancer.
O RLY.
...sorry dude.
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Copy 4:
gettin pizza!
pizza > no pizza
FOREALZ, want some?
can't eat... D:
Y not?
Getting the procedure tmr dat mom suggested we'd get.
d00d, no way am I having THAT 'procedure'.
Don't u think dad would've prevented his colon cancer if he could have?
gg. :)
I'm bookin' u 4 tmr.
I'm liking the copy very much... adds the right demographic to the dry info that we have to include.
ReplyDeleteI've added a few thoughts below...
From Sub Copy 2:
Maybe we should stop by?
Aren't we 2 young 4 colonoscopy? LOL
(AG's not: It might be good to add "LOL" to imply that he's still not taking things seriously enough, which in turn justifies the "Err..." from his friend. Your choice.)
Errr... my mom had polyps removed when she was only 45.
colonoscopy, ftw.
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Copy 3:
(AG's note: in the humorous context, which I think is successful, the "my mom..." line now seems a bit too abrupt. Below are two options. Again, your choice as to whether to include or not.)
Oh, reminds me to tell you, my mom had colon cancer. OK now.
or
Oh, reminds me to tell you, a doc just caught my mom's colon cancer. she's OK now.
Really? I didn't know women could get colon cancer.
O RLY.
...sorry dude. (maybe remove this and end on O RLY)
====OK, please ask if you have any questions. - AG